帮忙改下我的英语演讲稿

题目

帮忙改下我的英语演讲稿
My strength is making photographs,can put fatty thinner,Can put small eyes become big eyes,I also like the women's self-defense,I think women have to learn some defense to protect themselves,I also like the supplied pan-head,I can also design many different styles,Our bedroom many people like to let me give their comb,
I am an introverted person,I like quiet
I have many dreams of being a teacher or businessman,
Because my parents are in business,I've been under their influence
I could go first business selling clothes!
中午就要用了,
我只想让你们看看有没有错误句式，帮我看看！

答案

I am good at making photographs. I can make people look thinner and make eyes big and beautiful.
I like the women's self-defense,because I think women have to learn something to protect themselves.
I also like making hairstyles and I can design many different styles to put up hair. Therefore I often help my roommates make hairstyles and they all enjoy it.
I am an introverted person. I like to be quiet.and I have many dreams.
I want to a teacher or a businessman,because my parents are in business. Under their influence,I can do business first and sell clothes!