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Assignment:Are all important discoveries the results of focusing on one subjuct?
I think all important discoveries are the results of focusing on one subject.To find a truth or invent something needs a person to be hard-working、patience、and accumulate enough knowledge.Even the discoveries that seem to be discovered by fortune are also the results of concentration.Only when a person knows the knowledge about the aspect can he or she be lucky enough to find it.Truth is prepared for the one who is focusing on it.Throughout history,many famous people set the examples of the importance of concentration.
Thomas Edition,the famous inventor in America,invented over a thousand things during his life.The light bulb was brought out by him to light up the whole world.However,brfore it was invented,he had tried over a thousand experiments.Locking himself in the small lab,he spent all his day searching for the proper materials for the bulb.Failure followed him again an

答案

patience改为patient
Truth is prepared for the one把the 去掉
a thousand 改为thousands of things