请高手修改四级作文,

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请高手修改四级作文,
Spring Festival Gala on CCTV (2006年12月 四级真题）
1.许多人喜欢在除夕观看春节晚会.
2.有些人提出取消春节晚会.
3.我的看法.
The content of Spring Festival Gala has been the oder of the day.This does demonstrate the theory-----many peoples have enjoyed Spring Festival Gala very much.It is obvious that watching Spring Festival Gala at New year's eve has been a tradition for most people.They think ,the content of Spring Festival is very interesting and is suit to everyone.
However,other people stand on a different ground.They suggest that Spring Festival should be canceled because of it always include so much adverts that floks have adverts rather than the perfromance.What's more ,they consider it is too tedious to watch the same actor on every Sping Festival Gala.
In my standpoint ,we should cancel most of adverts of the Spring Festival Gala and add more new style programs and new actors.In this way,I do believe more people wil prefer Spring Festival Gala very much.

答案

The content of Spring Festival Gala has been the oder of the day.This does demonstrate the theory-----many peoples have enjoyed Spring Festival Gala very much.It is obvious that watching Spring Festival Gala at New year's eve has been a tradition for most people.They think , the content of Spring Festival is very interesting and is suit【able】 to everyone.
However,other people stand on a different ground.They suggest that Spring Festival should be canceled because 【of (DELETE it)】it always include【s】so much adverts that floks【folk】 have adverts rather than the perfromance【performance】.【此句是否生硬?可否改为 that folks stand adverts rather than enjoy the performance 】 What's more ,they consider it is too tedious to watch the same actor on every Sping Festival Gala.
In my standpoint ,we should cancel most of adverts of the Spring Festival Gala and add more new style programs 【programs in new styles (new style为 新历 之意)】and new actors.In this way,I do believe more people wil prefer Spring Festival Gala very much.