ielts 可以帮我改 ielts作文么?

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ielts 可以帮我改 ielts作文么?
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Television is playing more and more important role in today.But nowadays,more and more people think television broken the relationship of family members.I think this opinion is a little extreme views.
I think we have to know some news from TV every day.Now the technology develop so fast.Maybe some of us have no time to read the news from newspaper.So we should know the world from TV.We can watch TV with our family members and we can discuss the news with them,too.So I think it is a good way to get together with them.
If someone must hold that it is TV that alienates the relationship of family members.I want to tell them.TV is one of all the reasons,but it is not TV that took somebody from his family.We have a number of productions now.Maybe computer or mobile phone is the real “killer”,too.The reason why some of us feel TV alienated the relationship of family members is that we have not talked with them for a long time.
It is my opinion that

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我给你细致的改改.(别用那么多i think,这是英语考试,西方的思维更重视客观,your opinion则是相对主观的东西.)Compared with the old equipments such as radio,television has been playing more and more signifcan...