请哪位英语好的同学或是老师帮忙改下,考研英语二图表作文,纠正下语法和表达,

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请哪位英语好的同学或是老师帮忙改下,考研英语二图表作文,纠正下语法和表达,
2011年英语二图表作文：
The diagram above clearly illustrate that the domestic car market’s sharing of several different countries’ brand in China from 2008 to 2009.According to the table,in 2008.Japanese cars were the most popular production in the market,which relayed on their high quality and good reputation won the automobile market.Surprisingly,a dramatic elevation has occurred in home-made car’s selling in 2009,which has already exceeded Japanese identities,becoming Chinese main choice in buying a new car.And American brands’ popularity is still at a low level,which remains a stable proportion in the market sharing.
Some driving factors that contribute to the above-mentioned changes can be summarized as follows.First and foremost,China has become particularly active in car-related manufacturing,which obliges domestic car makers to devote amounts of money to improving their products’ quality .In addition,people in China would like choose home-made car in order to support our country’s economy.Emphasis should be given in the Chinese made cars’ price,which is much cheaper in comparison with other nations’ brands.
Taking all these factors we discussed into accounts,we may predict that with speedy development of our economy,people in China will more likely to prefer a Chinese brand car rather than other countries’ in the future.

答案

The diagram above clearly illustrates the car's domestic market shares of serval brands of different countries in China from 2008 to 2009. According to the table,in 2008.Japanese cars were the most popular productions in the market,which won the automobile market for their high quality and good reputation .Surprisingly,a dramatic elevation had occurred in home-made car’s selling in 2009. The sales volume had already exceeded Japanese brands, which made domestic cars become the main choice of Chinese in buying a new car. And American brands’ popularity was still at a low level,which remained a stable proportion in the market sharing.
Some driving factors that contribute to the above-mentioned changes can be summarized as follows.First and foremost,China has become particularly active in car-related manufacturing,which obliges domestic car makers to devote amounts of money to improving their products’ quality. Next, people in China would like choose home-made car in order to support our country’s economy.In addition,emphasis should be given in the price of Chinese-made cars,which is much cheaper in comparison with that of other nations’ brands.
Taking all these factors we discussed into accounts,we may predict that with speedy development of our economy,people in China will more likely to choose a Chinese brand car rather than that of foreign brands in the future.