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Does modern technology make life more cnvenient, or was life better when technology was simpler? What is your opinion?
It is difficult to think how we managed our lives before the widespread use of everday technologies such as the Internet and mobile phoes which we now take for granted. Despite this, how often do we stop to question ourselves, before going online to check our email accounts, whether modern technolgy has really made our lives more convenient? Some people may actually answer to the contrary, that modern technology has made their lives more complicated and ecen more difficult.
The obvious advantages of modern-day technologies are many. For example, if i do not want to go home and wash my laundry and wait for the weather to clear so i can hang it outside to dry, i simply invest in a machine that can both wash and dry my clothes. In additionm, i would feel safer in the knowledge that because my clothes are not hanging up outside the possibility of them being stolen is greatly reduced.
Inventors throughout the ages have thought of practically every device imaginable to assiist humans in conducting their everyday affairs, form baby strollers to life-support- machnes.In fact, we are inundated with technological contraptions in this modern world and there is no sign of a reversal in this trend occurring.
Imagine for a moment, if there were no televisions or computers. How would you know who had won the latest soccer match? Or what was going on in the news? What would the weather be like tomorrow? The problem with moder technology is nor the unlimited choices in gradgetry now made available to us, but instead, it is our increasing inability to tune out from an overload in infromation and our growing reliance on machines that perform mindless tasks which we could simply do for ourselves.
The use of modern technology does inspire inventors, designers andd engineers to speculate on what technology will be like in the future and how it could further mankind's survival and development.However, before we turn arund and say trchnology is the best thing that ever happended to us, it is vital that we remember who is in control of tehnology in order for it not to take over our lives completely.

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