帮我修改一下这篇文章英语作文(具体指点出哪里错误啊,

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帮我修改一下这篇文章英语作文(具体指点出哪里错误啊,
Recently.there is a heated discussion about whether people can play game while on duty or canot.some people maintain that people relax pressure by play game.besides playing game can raise the efficiency of work.
Qiute the contrary.The other people says,playing game should forbid while on dute.
on one hand,boss paid for employee,so employee should do better work while on dute.on the other hand,playing game effect the efficiency of work,because employee could not concentrated on work .
personally,I believe that our first task is do the best work in law time.As a good worker ,we should take advantage of time for work.what is more important that relaxing pressure can by many means,such as ,have a drink or a shortly chat .
so .now.lets we have a positive attitude,better work ,better learning .better enjoying work

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Recently.there is a heated discussion about whether people can play games while on duty or not.(play games 要用复数,whether or not 固定搭配) some people maintain that people relax pressure by play games.besides playing games can raise the efficiency of work.
Qiute the contrary.The other people say,playing game should be forbidden while on duty.
on one hand,having been paid,employee should do better work while on duty(此处用了非谓语动词)on the other hand,playing game will affact the efficiency of work,with employee not being concentrated on work .(此处用了独立主格)
personally,I believe that our first task is to do（不定式做表语） our best to（do one's best固定搭配） work in law time.As a good worker ,we should take advantage of time for work.what is more important（主语从句） is that relaxing pressure can by many means,such as ,have a drink or a short（是形容词） chat .
so .now.let（单词原型） we have a positive attitude,better work ,better learning .better enjoying work