帮忙看一下我这篇英语短文有没有什么严重的语法错误?

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帮忙看一下我这篇英语短文有没有什么严重的语法错误?
短文是这样的：Jerry is flying a kite in the park.He was very happy.But now he is surprised.Because the kite line is borken.He can not get.His classmate Mary come say:"I can help you with your to it." Mary stretched her hands.But Mary fell into the water.Jerry is very happy.
有没有什么语法错误,比如过去式,现在进行时,这些,我搞不清啊!
大哥大姐帮下小妹忙!
是现在进行时，一楼，不是过去式，老师要求.
Jerry is flying a kite in the park.He is very happy.But now he is surprised.Because the kite line is borken.He can not get.His classmate Mary come and say:"I can help you with your to it." Mary stretched her hands.But Mary fell into the water.Jerry is very happy.

答案

时态太混乱了,标点错误也很多,But这个词不能出现在句首除非用However代替,而且内容不妥..Mary掉河里了,怎么Jerry那么高兴啊?居心不良!还有,Mary stretched her hands,你想表达什么?看不懂..其实一楼分析的很好啊,应...