悬赏高手修改我短小的英语日记

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悬赏高手修改我短小的英语日记
i loving living every single day,actually.i always felt boring.i hope exciting thing hapened suddenly.i need to change someting used to do to gain paints for my boring life.
but i know,many people had the same felt as my feel now.you must feel boring again if you into my mind.
i need someone gives me some advices.may it can be my guiding star.i will hold on forever if it could work.
the night is getting deep.i alse feel so,as boring as hell.heaven forbid me,please.
i thought i needed found a girl in the crowd steet at long time ago.the reason is simple that i was so feard to talked with women ingered a long time.i cry silently,i cry inside of me.i cry hopelessly,cause my feard.
thank you for you seen my date,thank you from my heart,

答案

首句改为I love living ...++++++ love doing sth.为固定短语.
I always felt boring改为I always felt bored ,boring指人对事物感觉无聊,bored则指人本身觉得无聊.++++++
many people had the same felt as my feel now.改为many people have the same feeling as mine now. Same为形容词,后跟名词,feel的名词形式为feeling,另外后面的my feeling可改为mine来指代,可显得简洁些.++++++
you must feel boring again中的boring同样改为bored.另外你的again是不是表达得不太正确?可改为from time to time或其他的什么.+++++
may it can be my guiding star.改为Preheps it can become my guiding star你看怎么样?+++++
the night is getting deep.中的getting deep 应该为getting deeper,getting、becoming等词后面应该跟比较级,而非原形.+++++++++
i alse feel so,如果你是想表达also的话就稍显啰嗦了,可改为I feel so (as well)/, too +++++
as boring as hell.heaven forbid me,please. 表达不清.你可以说Life is boring as hell或The dark night (starry night/sky)is boring as hell.
而forbid的意思为 1.禁止,不许2.阻止,妨碍.与句意不太相符,你是不是想说forgive? ++++++++
i thought i needed found a girl ...的时态与全文又不符,应把needed found 改为 need to found. ++++
你的at long time ago又是什么意思?你的前半句的意思是“我觉得我应该在拥挤的大街中寻找一个女孩.”然后呢?“at long time ago”-“在很久以前”吗?+++++++
...ingered a long time. ? 应该改为who has ignoreme for a long time.
i cry inside of me 应改为I cry inside my heart. ++++
i cry hopelessly,cause my feard. 后半句可改为it also cause my fear.
最后一句可改为Thank you for seeing my date,thank you from the bottom of my heart -“感谢您看我的日志,衷心地感谢你” ++++

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