最近写的英语短文,（50分）

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最近写的英语短文,（50分）
Hello,everyone here.Today I like to give my presentation about today and tomorrow.
we know that there are many discussions about the topic,which teach us to stress on today but not waste the time,tomorrow is far away,we need to do our task that's should be done today and can't be left to do tomorrow,so today's topic I want to give my opinion about the topic.
First,we know we have to pass today,without today we can't have tomorrow,so many of us say today is more important than tomorrow.However,it’s safe to say that we can't miss tomorrow.If we have a very sad day today,we still want to have a good time today; the answer is of course not.We hope we can have a new happy day tomorrow,and forget about the things today.What’s more,lots of philosophers say that the work need to be done should be finish today but to last tomorrow.Yes,it's true we need to do our job in the right time in our ability,but we can see that if we can’t endure the hard work today,do we need to go on our work today,we really can’t put it tomorrow.If we have a good rest,don't we present a better task?There is a thing we must know that lots of celebrities died because of the hard work one day.So I believe that we can do the things tomorrow and the result will be better.
Second,as the famous writher Zhu Ziqing said in his famous writing that we waste time whatever we do,we think,then we waste time,we wash,then we waste time,we read books then we waste time...
I can’t agree with what he said.The interesting thing in our life is nothing but sad about the time we lost.I believe that our happiness in life is just enjoying the small things happen today,no matter whether is important to our task,our study.Maybe when we are old,we will remember that the small things happen in a common day but not study and study.so we need to pay attention to today,but there is no needs for us to do the only things that is useful for our future,we should love today,love the sunshine,love the wind ,and love the snow maybe.
That’s all,everyone,I hope my presentation will give you quite different view about today and tomorrow.
以上是一篇很简单的英语演讲文章,里面有一些错误,还有,语法不是很通顺,
如果可以的话,可以用括号（小括号、中括号都可以）标出错误的地方,然后帮改正,以便我知道哪里写错了,
如果还能帮我修缮一下使得文章更好的话,我还可以再追加更多分数

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Hello, everyone here. Today I‘d like to give a presentation about today and tomorrow.
we know that there are many discussions about the topic, which teaches us to stress on today but not to waste the time, tomorrow is far away, we need to do our task that should be done today and can't be left until tomorrow, （so today's topic I want to give my opinion about the topic. 抑郁中……）so the topic I want to give you all is
my opinion about the topic 我估计你要表达这个意思,）
as we all know, without today we can't have tomorrow, so many of us say today is more important than tomorrow. However, we can't miss tomorrow（碰血ing………………下面的.）
I can’t agree with what he said. The most interesting thing in our life is nothing but sadness about the time we lost. （这句想表达虾米意思.）I believe that our happiness in life is enjoying the small things happen today, no matter whether they are important to our task or our study. Maybe when we are old, we will remember that the small things happened in a common day but not study. so we need to pay attention to today, but there is no needs for us to do the only thing that will be helpful in our future, we should love today, love the sunshine, love the wind ,and love the snow.
That’s all, everyone, I hope my presentation will give you A
quite different view about today and tomorrow.
.正再吐血ing