简单英语作文修改

题目

简单英语作文修改
The shopping experience
The things happened many years ago.At that moment I was a little child.I remember that was a National day.
That is a fine day,The sunshine through the clouds.In that beautiful day,My mum decided to go shopping with me.
In the market had many clothes,But I didn’t know How did pick those clothes.Because I was very little and shy.But the last,I found a red T-shirt,I loved it because I loved red then I bought it.
Because it was a new clothes,So the T-shirt was washed then put on the rope in outside.I was so happied I bought a new clothes,I wanted to wear it when the term began.
The next day.I had a good mood then I jumped and jumped to take the clothes but there no clothes,no anything.I hate thief!
任何语法时态上的错误,

答案

帮你粗劣地看了看!发现有以下几点错误! 1 The sunshine through the clouds. 单词through不能用作动词,一般做副词 形容词 介词用!可以改成run through! 2 In that beautiful day !具体的一天应该用介词on !例如我们平时经常说的on Friday ! 3 In the market had many clothes !典型的中式英语!应该改成：There were many clothes In the market !4 But I didn’t know How did pick those clothes!语法错误!正确语法应为：know how to do sht!应该改成But I didn’t know How to pick those clothes 5 So the T-shirt was washed then put on the rope in outside.in是多余的!应该将它去掉!去掉后：So the T-shirt was washed then put on the rope outside ! 6 I was so happied!用错单词!单词happied改成happy! 不知说得对不对,希望你借鉴!