这篇托福作文可以打几分?谢谢有考试经验的大虾指教和点评.这是我写的第一篇托福作文,

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这篇托福作文可以打几分?谢谢有考试经验的大虾指教和点评.这是我写的第一篇托福作文,
When it comes to the question whether subjects such as art,music,and drama should be a part of every child’s basic education,opinion varies from person to person.Some may think such subjects related to arts are essential to children’s growth while the other think children are wasting time if they spare time on learning such subjects.As for me,I hold the opinion that subjects such as art,music,and drama should be a part of every child’s basic education and reasons are presented as follows.
First of all,art is a good way to inspire provoking-thought which would certainly benefit the study in other realm.Many scientists bear a deep interest in arts,and art in turn inspires their thought.For example,the famous physician Albert Einstein is also a violinist.He liked to play the violin for a short time during the process of a experiment.To some extent,violin made him relaxed for a while after a long time complex thinking and inspired him for f

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