求看托福作文值几分

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求看托福作文值几分
Increase teacher’s salary for promotingeducation quality?
As the society increasingly improves,economics become the key bones of the development of a country.Salaryinevitably becomes a judgment to a person’s work.The more salary they earn,the higher level they are.This also happens in the school yard.However,it isa controversy that if higher salary brings better qualified education.I perceivethat not higher but appropriate salary is the promise of the qualifiededucation.
For the slender salary of good teachers,ofcourse,a rise will exert the advancement of the education quality.Highersalary is a supportive way to let skilled teachers’ focus totally on how toimprove their teaching skills.Reversely,they will find another way to raisetheir family,even illegally strive for that.For example,my aunt is a goodEnglish teacher who teaches in an easily understandable method,however,has apoor salary for 20 years.She always thought that she deserves better salarythat the schoo

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对不起,恕我直言,如果严格评估这篇文章20点几乎 在一般情况下,这篇文章的结构是相当完整. 但觉得论据说服力不强,其原因是相当模糊的,句话是不够具体,逻辑问题另一个房东语法错误是有点太. 一些错误直接影响的语义影...