Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present.Do you agree or disagree?

题目

Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present.Do you agree or disagree?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today an increasing number of people,especially teenagers,believe that history is no use at all.Personally,though the social is developing in so high speed,I think it is vital for us to review the past.
Learning about the past is benefit for ourselves.Due to retrospect the past,we can find some shortages of ourselves.Because of this,we can correct the mistakes we made in the past and be careful when we meet the same problem next time so that we will not misdo again.Spending some time summarizing the things we have done can avoid us making same mistake and it obviously can give us more time to explore the newer stuff.I have a friend called Lisa who studied very hard.She always stay up but cannot get a satisfying grade in tests.The main reason is that she only does new exercise but dislike learning from the old exercise she

答案

过渡词和衔接词丰富,长短句搭配合理,但是简单词词汇比重稍微有点偏高
建议把 high speed 改成 high-speed
satisfying...grade,a country more prosperous ,many famous theory 在英语本族语中很少使用
建议你到新东方批改网上改改,都是外教改的
原来自己写了一篇自我感觉良好的,拿上来粗批一下改的满目疮痕啊.
还好帮我指出了问题!最好托福考的时候作文写得很爽