英语作文批改谢谢

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英语作文批改谢谢
the frist day of school .I was disppointed at my classmates,so from just got to school until the bell has rang for the class they talking all the time.it's repugnant to me even into my classroom.but I kown what should to do ,what should't to do.in order to changed my life and fate I must keep to it,don't stop until my studies finished.then I sat the frist row of the classroom .it's remain me what did together during our summer hoildays.
now we learned at different classes.I holp we can successfully completed our studies .come on brother!it's certain that we shall succeed!tommrrow belong who is a really brave man!I think so.what about you?

答案

Today is my frist day of school.
下面表达有点混乱,不知道你的意思.
I was disppointed by my classmates, since they arrived until the school is finished they were talking all the time.
That's really repugnanted me, especially in my classroom.
I kown what should do, what should't.
In order to changed my life, I must keep to it,(这里的IT是指什么?表达不清.)hang in there until I finish my study.
Then,I sat at the frist row of the classroom.
It's remain me what did together during our summer hoildays.
（它提醒了我暑假一起做的事.It's指什么?together是和谁一起,和你做第一排有什么关系?完全看不懂哪里来的这一句）
We now in different classes.如果说班级,用IN CLASS
I wish both of us can successfully completed our studies .
Come on brother! We certainly will succeed!
Tommrrow belong to the real brave man!I believe in that!
So should you!
在你原文的基础上改的.修正了一些语法.
你应该多看一些外国的小短文.了解外国人写作的习惯.
你的句子的模式还很中国化,外国人可能很难理解.
比如说,最后一句,我坚信,你呢?
外国人不会这么讲,他可能会说,我坚信,你也应该相信!