英文日志,

题目

英文日志,
I hope it is a sort of lease.
I hope it will turn out to be a right selection.
I will give thanks to my close friends ,thank you for your assistance and tolerance for my passive personality and nervous disposition.
to the elders,I have to say that I have tried my best to live up to your expectation.
as the old saying goes,success belongs to the one who never elaborately tried to become successful.
I firmly believe that I had earned every ounce of my final success,although sacrifice and dedication look likes to saps .
and...I know you are looking at me
God bless,always.
RT,有没有什么语法错误,或者逻辑错误,.
as the old saying goes,success belongs to the one who never deliberately tried to become successful.

答案

感觉第一句应该用虚拟样.