雅思小作文,请大家帮忙评分,后天考试了

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雅思小作文,请大家帮忙评分,后天考试了
The table below gives information about the numbers of international students from four areas of the world who came to study at university level in a western country in 2000 and 2005.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The table illustrates how the number of international students from four areas of the world who came to study at university level in a western country changed from2000 to 2005.

Over the period from 2000 to 2005,the origin of international students in two of the four countries showed a rise,including India which experienced a little rise from15000 in 2000 to 16000 in 2005,compared with Brazil which rose from 2000 to 8000.However,the other two countries underwent similar degree of decline.The origin of international students in China went down from 35000 to 22000,showing a shape dechine,while that of Japan went down from 6000 to 4000.

Another point worth mentioning is that though international students in China showed a decline and international students in India showed a rise,both of the two were far ahead of those in Japan and Brazil.And international students in China seemed to be the top of the four no matter in 2000 or 2005,opposit to which,Brazil was dropped far behind in 2000 and international students in Japan was the lowest in2005.

Let's turn to the total condition,the international students in four countries dropped 8000from 58000 in2000 to 50000 in 2005.

答案

还不错,在考试的时候字迹是决定考试成绩的关键所在之一,另外,文章详略尚有改进.