帮忙看看英语自我介绍行不行,急

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帮忙看看英语自我介绍行不行,急
我叫**,我十二岁了,我来自**,我是一个内向的女孩,我会说一点英文.我最喜欢的科目是英语,因为我认为它非常有趣.我喜欢画画和阅读,我长大想当一个英语翻译家.好的,这就是我.
这样写行不行：
Everybody is good!My name is** ,I am twelve years old,I am from**,I was a shy girl,I can speak a little English.I most like the subject is English,because I think it is very interesting.Ilike drawing and reading,I want to be an English translator.Okay,this is me.五分钟以内,

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帮你修改一下：Hello everybody! My name is** , I am twelve years old,I am from**, I was a shy girl, I can speak a little English. English is the subject I like most, for I think the subject is very interesting. I like drawing and reading too. I want to be an English translator in the future .
Okay, this is me. thank you.