求高手批改雅思作文!顺便看看能拿多少分吧 嘻嘻

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求高手批改雅思作文!顺便看看能拿多少分吧 嘻嘻
Constanly,children's educational methods are arguing by us.At present,a staggering rate of competition exist in the society and how to nuture children in a proper way becomes very essential than ever before.Someone holds their opinions that children should be tortured competition awareness in order to make them more excellent.Others,however,holds that they need to acquire skills about how to cooperate more than compete.

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