谁能帮我找下这篇英语文章的错误.

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谁能帮我找下这篇英语文章的错误.
帮忙改改这篇文章.感觉很多地方不顺而且语句重复有问题啊


In the West Minster Cathedral of unknown tablet inscribed


When I was young and free and my imagination had no limits, I dreamed of changing the world. As I grew older and wiser, I discovered the world would not change, so I shortened my sights somewhat and decided to change only my country.


But it, too, seemed immovable.


As I grew into my twilight years, in one last desperate attempt, I settled for changing only my family, those closest to me, but alas, they would have none of it.


And now as I lie on my deathbed, I suddenly realize: If I had only changed my self first, then by example I would have changed my family.


From their inspiration and encouragement, I would then have been able to better my country and, who knows, I may have even changed the world.

Therefore, we'd better come to the conclusion that you world rather change yourself than change the world.


And,When I was a little kid , I wanted to be a teacher when I listened to my teacher carefully. I thought I can be a teacher when I grow up. I can help many students learn things well. I can play with my students, too. and we are good friends.


when I grew up, I want to be a doctor because I saw many doctors save their patients. To be a doctor is really great. I think I can be a doctor when I grow up. Then I can help many people out of danger. I will be the happiest girl in the world. Because I can change the world.
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However, the most difficult thing in the world is not change the world, but change yourself. We can change the world by changing ourselves. We are what we think. A person's faith will ultimately determine what he will be. Life is a kind of idea, is a kind of subjective description. We can change our lives by changing our thoughts. We can change the world start from chang ourselves.


The world is not I want to change; I can only change myself from the beginning. all to transform their own understanding of their own. Don’t try to know all the meaning of life. As you grow up, you will understand it naturally. Others’ experiences are not yours.


Change yourself, change is successful state before, try to change their shortcomings, will give you a brilliant!


Change yourself, make yourself more outstanding, more perfect, let life shine for change. So,No one can go back and make a brand new start..Anyone can start from now and make a brand new ending. We can change the world start from chang ourselves.


at last i’d like to share a famous saying of Gandhi with all of you ,that is: if you want to change the world, then you must change yourself first.” Form now to try another way to live, let myself love myself.Never give up!

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