帮忙改英语日记…

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帮忙改英语日记…
第一次写英语日记!大家帮我改出错误…some time.I can't to control myself.but always to keep my behavior better as much as possible I have burden .the burden is big enough.In my Qzone's signature i write down that every moment and every tings are all around the king Hong~Nowadays!I afraid to read again!Because I have not reach my goal!Entrance examination will coming!When I looking my score I feeling very sad!Because I come back already 3 mouth!First I have not pass,just 357!Although I have 428 in recently exam!But it away from the cutting score!what can I do for my career!In today before yesterday.I was careless which I lose my mp4 in the street when I riding my bicycle!I search for around the corner!But I can't to find!Less than 1 minute!

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…some times.,I can't control myself.But I always try to make my behavior better as much as possible !I have a big burden.In my Qzone's signature I wrote down what every moment around me that is king Hong~Nowadays!I afraid to read it again!Because I have not reach my goal!Entrance examination is coming!When I looking at my score I feel very sad.Because I have already come back for about 3 mouths!The first time I did not pass,only got 357!Although I got 428 in recently exam,but it is far away from the cutting score!what can I do for my career!In today before yesterday.I was so careless that I lost my mp4 in the street when I was riding my bicycle!I searched it all around the corner!But I can't find it!Just after 1 minute!