自己写的一段英文小作文,

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自己写的一段英文小作文,
For us young people,the lack of infrastructure in China's countryside may be a key factor of putting back our ambitions and aggressiveness,which is not good for our prospects.Moreover,as more and more peasant-workers bring great fortune to cities,the number of left-behind children and empty-nesters is becoming bigger and bigger meanwhile.Faced with loneliness and hunger,their life is far from ours.
Hence people should develop the productive forces to weaken the opposition between urban and rural area,and try our best to help rural people relieve from poverty.Only by doing so,could both the city and the countryside have a bright future.
如果哪里有硬伤请斧正.如果哪个地方在用法上修改一下可以更好,感激不尽!
aggressiveness应为aggressivenesses

答案

a little bit too Chglish.
No need to use so many complex sentences. One or two good sentences is enough.
Try to get rid of the Chinese way of thinking and it is better to be correct than to be complicated but wrong wording.
Maybe try it again. To be simpe but not weird first.
Good luck