帮我检查以下初三英语作文有什么语法错误的地方.

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帮我检查以下初三英语作文有什么语法错误的地方.
Dear Li Hong,
I am really sorry to hear that you quarreled with one of your calssmates.I know you want to get on well with your calssmates.Now ,I give some suggestions to you .First,you should keep a good mood and don't angry easily.Second,if your calssmates in trouble,you should help them.Third,you need to collaborate with others.Fourth,try to be friendly to others.Finaly,always have a talk with your calssmates and tell your thought to them.
I am sure you will get on well with your classmates soon.
Yours,
Emily.

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Dear Li Hong,
I am really sorry to hear the news that you quarreled with one of your calssmates.As I know,you want to get on well with your calssmates.Now ,I will give you some suggestions.Firstly,you should try your best to keep a good mood every day and never lose temper easily.Secondly,if your calssmates are in trouble,you should help them as much as possible.Thirdly,you have to be friendly to others and tell your thought to them in order to keep collaborate with others.
I am sure you will get on well with your classmates soon.
Yours,
Emily.