你刚从电视上获悉，2014年4月5日清晨，云南永善县发生了5.3级地震。地震造成25人受伤，6.86万人受灾，22239间房受损，1651间倒塌，很多人无家可归

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你刚从电视上获悉，2014年4月5日清晨，云南永善县发生了5.3级地震。地震造成25人受伤，6.86万人受灾，22239间房受损，1651间倒塌，很多人无家可归。地震过后，交通被堵塞，水电供应也中断了。重建家园迫在眉睫。消息播出以后, 人们纷纷伸出了援助之手。作为班长，你也想号召你们班的同学奉献爱心。请以班委会的名义用英语写一封倡议书。词数120左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）。
要点如下：
1. 地震造成的重大损失;
2. 大家纷纷献出爱心;
3. 作为学生我们该做些什么？
Dear classmates,
________________________________________________________________________
Class Committee 

答案

Dear classmates,
April5,2014, a magnitude-5.3 earthquake attacked Yongshan County of Yunnan Province unexpectedly. It did great harm to the county. As a result of the earthquake, at least 25 people were injured; about 68,600 people were affected, and what was worse, many more people were made homeless. After the earthquake, the traffic was blocked and the supply of water and electricity was cut off. It is urgent to rebuild their homes and they are badly in need of help.
After the news was reported, people all over the country showed their love and care in different ways.
As students,we should give a hand to those people in trouble. So offer your only pocket money, and let’s help to fill the world with love.
Class Committee

解析

试题分析：这是提纲类写作，考生要先审清题目要求，确定好作文人称、时态、写作要点、段落等基本内容。本文的话题是云南永善县的地震，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，内容有：1. 地震造成的重大损失; 2. 大家纷纷献出爱心; 3. 作为学生我们该做些什么？显然单单翻译要点肯定是不够的，考生要适当增加细节，如造成的损失要具体的说明，大家怎么献出爱心，最后一条可以结合自己的生活进行阐述。明确作文的基本内容后，就是选用准确的词汇和恰当的句子来表达。在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，让文章更有文采。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如： Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。
【亮点说明】范文要点明确，语言精炼，好的短语居多：do great harm to 对…造成伤害，As a result of 由于，因为， cut off切断， in different ways以不同的方式，. It is urgent to rebuild their homes and they are badly in need of help.这句话使用了it做形式主语， As students,we should give a hand to those people in trouble.这句话使用了those指代“那些人”还有介词短语做定语。另外文章还使用了what was worse,使文章读起来更加连贯。