英语作文修改(尤其是语法错误）

题目

英语作文修改(尤其是语法错误）
Is money everything ?
As it is firmly believed that money is very essential to us. Having money we can live in luxurious house, eat senior food, travel to wherever you like. However, since money can bring us so many things, is it means that money is everything? The answer is obviously no.
Firstly, money can't make us have true friends, though you may find the richer you are, the more people want to be your friends. Friendships of this kind are always not genuine, once you loose your fortune you loose your "friends". Only with sincerity can we make true friends. Money plays an unimportant role in making true friends.
Secondly, money can't buy life . Whether rich or poor, god is justice, he didn't allow money to turn the wheel of time backward, however rich a person is, he is bound to leave the world. Only these who have a positive attitude to life won't feel regret when he say goodbye to the world.
Apart from those mentioned above, there still remain many things that money is unable to do. Money can't give us a dependable lover, money can't offer you happiness, money can't provide you with a healthy body...
Taking all the factors into account, we can finally reach the conclusion---money isn't everything.

答案

Is money everything
As is firmly believed ,money is very essential to us.With money we can live in luxurious houses,eat nice food,travel to wherever you like.However,since money can bring us so many things,does this mean that money is everything?The answer is obviously no.
Firstly,money can't help us have true friends,though you may find that the richer you are,the more people would like to be your friends.Friendships of this kind are always not genuine; once you lose your fortune you lose your "friends".Only with sincerity can we make true friends.Money plays an unimportant role in making true friends.
Secondly,money can't buy life.Whether rich or poor,God is equal with everyone,he didn't allow money to turn the wheel of time backward,however rich a person is,he is bound to leave the world.Only these who have a positive attitude to life won't feel regret when he says goodbye to the world.
Apart from what have been mentioned above,there are still many things that money is unable to do.Money can't give us a dependable lover,money can't offer you happiness,neither can money provide you with a healthy body...
Taking all the factors into account,we can finally reach the conclusion that money isn't everything.
写的不错,只是语法错误不少