求帮忙修改一篇高中英语自我介绍

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求帮忙修改一篇高中英语自我介绍
请帮忙修改修改.有语法错误或者语病的帮我指出来.希望多帮我改用一些从句,写的差还请谅解,修改很到位的另外加分
Hello everyone.Happy Christmas Day.My name is xxx.I am sixteen years old.Igraduate from XXX Middle School.
In my spare time .I like to read some books.I think reading could enlarge my knowledge.I must study hard so that my ten-year hard work will pay off.I hope I can be admitted to the ideal university .I hope we can work together to progress together.We shouldn’t let down our parents.

答案

一读就知道你的英语基础不太扎实,虽然没多少语法错误但是用词造句比较awkward.不过你年龄还小,有的是机会提高~Hello everyone,happy Christmas Day!My name is xxx,a sixteen-year-old girl/boy,who has graduated f...