求英语好的朋友的帮我看看,这篇文章有什么语法错误

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求英语好的朋友的帮我看看,这篇文章有什么语法错误
Hello,my name is Shuzhan,
嗨,我的名字是Shuzhan,
I come from a beautiful city-liupanshui.
我来自一个美丽的city-liupanshui.
I'm 18 years old.
我18岁.
I think I think that I am the youngest in our class
我想我认为我是我们班里年龄最小的
But I am happy to study in this class.
但是我很高兴在这堂课里学习.
In the university of each day,I feel like making progress.
在大学的每一天,我觉得取得进展.
I am the class the most fat boy,height is not high also,but I don't inferiority for it.
我是班上最胖的男孩,身高也不高,但我不自卑.
Because I believe a realy man,meaning more important than outside.
因为我相信一个真正的男人,意义更重要的外面.
I like playing computer games,listening to music and watching movies.
我喜欢玩电脑游戏、听音乐、看电影.
For me,the biggest hobby is watching movies,I put the film as a part of my life.
对我来说,最大的爱好是看电影,我把电影作为我生活的一部分.
My favorite movie star is Jim Carrey,he is tall and handsome,is my heart the best actor.
我最喜欢的电影明星是吉姆·凯瑞,他又高又帅,是我心灵的最好的演员.

答案

Hello,my name is Shuzhan,
嗨,我的名字是Shuzhan,
I came from a beautiful city-liupanshui.
我来自一个美丽的city-liupanshui.
I'm 18 （that's enough)
我18岁.
I think I was considered the youngest in our class
我想我认为我是我们班里年龄最小的
But I am happy to study here.
但是我很高兴在这堂课里学习.
Hello,my name is Shuzhan,
嗨,我的名字是Shuzhan,
I come from a beautiful city-liupanshui.
我来自一个美丽的city-liupanshui.
I'm 18 years old.
我18岁.
I think I think that I am the youngest in our class
我想我认为我是我们班里年龄最小的
But I am happy to study in this class.
但是我很高兴在这堂课里学习.
Each day in the university, I feel like making progress.
在大学的每一天,我觉得取得进展.
I am the fatest boy in the class , not high either, but I don't inferiority for it.
我是班上最胖的男孩,身高也不高,但我不自卑.
Because I believe that the meaning is more important than outsiders of a real man.
因为我相信一个真正的男人,意义更重要的外面.
I like PC games, music and movies.
我喜欢玩电脑游戏、听音乐、看电影.
The biggest hobby for me, is watching movies, witch is a part of my life.
对我来说,最大的爱好是看电影,我把电影作为我生活的一部分.
My favorite movie star is Jim Carrey, he is tall and handsome, the best actor in my mind .
我最喜欢的电影明星是吉姆·凯瑞,他又高又帅,是我心灵的最好的演员.
改动不大,口语成分较浓