我写的英语作文,请指教

题目

我写的英语作文,请指教
The Spring Festival is the most important holiday in China.Before the Spring Festival,people usually clean their house.They will also buy some flowers to decorate his own house.During the Spring Festival,adults usually give children lucky money.During the Spring Festival,families get together to eat dumplings,watch TV.
I like the Spring Festival.
【题目是春节】

答案

第三句的his改成their,因为你前面主语用的是they
还有最后两句可以用and连接下,因为两次During the Spring Festival太重复了.