修改一段中译英

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修改一段中译英
古往今来,“时间”对人来说是个最难捉摸的东西.世上每人每天都有着等量的时间——24小时.并且大家也都一样,只能占有“今天”.一点不假,昨日之日不可留,一去不复返了,而明天,也许要使人们期待着永远也盼不来.这就是说,每个活着的人就只能掌握“今天”——只能掌握此时、此刻.不过,怎样使用这短暂的24小时,我们每个人都可以各有千秋；我们可以在里面填进去不同的内容,从而得到的结果也自然各不相同.有的人蹉跎岁月,延误时机；有的人把时间用来为别人造福；有的人则自己努力向上.你怎样度过你的时间呢?抽空好好考虑一下这个问题准会令你受益匪浅!
以下是我的翻译,请帮忙修改,
Time is one of the greatest riddles of the ages.Every one in the world has the same amount of it-twenty-four hours--each day.We are all alike,too,in only having today.Yes,yesterday is gone,tomorrow may never come-so every living person has today,this hour,this minute at his disposal.We do,however,differ greatly in the ways we use this little measure of time; we differ in what we put into it and therefore of course in what take out of it.Some idle away their chances; others use them to benefit other people or to try to move onward in life.
It is always worthwhile to pause and ponder over what you do with your own time.

答案

古往今来,“时间”对人来说是个最难捉摸的东西.Throughout the ages,"time" on the people is the most elusive thing.世上每人每天都有着等量的时间——24小时.Per person per day the world all have the same amount of time - 24 hours.并且大家也都一样,只能占有“今天”.And we all are the same,only possession of "Today." 一点不假,昨日之日不可留,一去不复返了,而明天,也许要使人们期待着永远也盼不来.Point does not leave,not stay the day yesterday,gone,and tomorrow,maybe never to make people look forward to hope not to.这就是说,每个活着的人就只能掌握“今天”——只能掌握此时、此刻.This means that every living person who can grasp the "Today" - can only grasp at this time,at the moment.不过,怎样使用这短暂的24小时,我们每个人都可以各有千秋；我们可以在里面填进去不同的内容,从而得到的结果也自然各不相同.However,the use of this short 24 hours,each of us can be great deal of diversity; we can go in there filled with different content,so the results obtained naturally vary.有的人蹉跎岁月,延误时机；有的人把时间用来为别人造福；有的人则自己努力向上.Some people waste a years,the delay time; some people devote their time to the benefit of others; some others up their own efforts.你怎样度过你的时间呢?How do you spend your time?抽空好好考虑一下这个问题准会令你受益匪浅!Taking the time to properly consider the issue and potential will make you benefit!