紧急 求英语高手修改一下我的作文 语法+逻辑

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紧急 求英语高手修改一下我的作文 语法+逻辑
Andy,a banker,was convicted of murder.He was innocent,but nobody trusted him.Hopelessly,he had to go to the prison.However,he never gave up himself.Even if he was in the prison,he could be as excellent as he ever be .The prisoners were pretty passive.They even didn't know what free was.Andy wasn't moved by them.Wiping all the difficulties out,he crawled 500 yards through raw sewage to a nearby river .He crawled to freedom in this way.
This is a story of hope on book The Shawshank Redemption .I admire Andy after i read this novel.The sentence "Hope is a good thing,maybe the best of things ,and no good thing ever dies."represents the spirit of Andy very well.Yes,never lose your hope however difficult the situation is.The result you get will show you the power of hope is really strong .
In this year's Olympic Games,Chinese men's gymnastics team also showed us the power of hope.With hope,they achieved an unimaginable success.
The hope has made Andy,Chinese men's gymnastics team successful.Have a try.With hope,miracles can happen on everyone!

答案

Hopelessly用的不对,你可以用Pitifully甚至hopefully.Go to the prison最好是GO TO PRISON
.as he ever had been.
.what freedom was
Andy wasn't changed by them要好一点.
in this way可以去掉.
.on the book.
maybe the best thing?我记得电影里似乎是这样哈,不好意思不太清楚
the sentence,.,represents.我偏向于tells the soul of Andy,去掉very well 只是说了这么几年英语的语感,不改也行,但是very well真的可以删掉.
The result u r getting will show u that the power of hope is really strong.或者 will show u how powerful is the hope.
最后一段开头不要The,而且个人觉得可以这么改：Hope made Andy what he was and the Chinese team a success.Miracles do happen on everyone.