求英文大神帮我修改语法错误,

题目

求英文大神帮我修改语法错误,
Good afternoon guys,today I’m going to present a presentation about the relationships between insurance and nation’s health care and how do they impact on economy.
Along with the rapid development of people’s living standard,people have to face more various pressures from all aspects,such as work pressure,family pressure,and finance pressure and so forth,therefore people do not have enough time for entertaining or sporting due to a high competitive society.Finally some of people are getting sick.For making the cost of medical accident to the minimum,a large number of people spend money on health stuff,such as health insurance in order to cover huge costs from medical accident,in this case,the demand for health insurance is increasing,so that the supply also increasing,but the price has to go up,because on one side,the more people need health insurance the more economic benefit suppliers will get,on the other hand,more risks are coming up,if the price remains unch

答案

第二行 去掉 do
第三行去掉 along
第六行 For making the cost of medical accident to the minimum有问题
第七行 health stuff用 health care 比较好
最后一行 has increased用 increase比较好 could用will 比较好