暑假写的英语作文2篇,(中考水平以上)

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暑假写的英语作文2篇,(中考水平以上)
Our class is going on a sightseeing on Saturday,March 16th Students are expected to leave at 8:00 in the morning on our school bus and arrive at East Lake Park 3 hours later.A mountain-climbing contest and a boat-rowing race will be organized then.Students will have a picnic at thirteen.In the afternoon,everyone can walk around the lake,visit the Sea World and take photos.Our school bus is going to leave there at 5:30 p.m.
Class 4,Grade 2
假如你是Tom,你已经参加了本次游览活动,请你参照阅读材料的相关信息,以Tom的名义写一篇名为”An Unforgettable(难忘的) Sightseeing”的文章(80词左右)
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我的文章:That’s an unforgettable day from beginning!We sang and chatted happily on the bus,and 3 hours passed quickly.The mountain-climbing contest and boat rowing race were both very exciting!Our group mate Sarah was injured in the mountain-climbing contest but she went on climbing.I admired her!Finally our group got a second prize,we were all very happy.We ate sandwiches for picnic,Helen made sandwiches well and she brought much to share with us.I took many photos of the swans in the lake when we were walking around the lake.We left there with nice memories at 5:30 p.m.(这篇文章差不多100词了请帮我精简一下…另外请在改动的地方做上记号
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1.电影院电影通告:Enjoy Your Favorites in Star Cinema
November
Monday-Thursday
The Lion King,Shrek(I):11:00;13:00;15:00;19:00
Friday-Sunday
Voldemort:13:00;15:00
The Lion King,Shrek(I):13:00; 19:00
Tickets must be booked any time up to 30 minutes before the film starts.Ticket holders are given seat numbers.
Drinks are provided.
Ticket price:Adults:$18; Children under 6:$8; Students under 16:$12
Smoking is not allowed anywhere in the cinema.Mobile phones must be turned off.
请参照阅读材料中的相关信息,以Jean的名义写一张留言条,告诉你的好朋友Tom星期天晚上 The Lion King的电影票买好了,约他18:40在戏院门口等.并简单告诉他看电影的注意事项(80词)
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我的文章:Dear Tom,
I’ve booked the tickets of “The Lion King”.The film will be on at 19:00 this Sunday.I will wait for you at 18:40 beside the gate of the Star Cinema.Drinks are provided in the cinema,so you don’t need to bring water.The ticket price for us is $12 each,because we are “Children under 16”.Smoking is not allowed there but both of us don’t smoke,isn’t it?But we must turn off our mobile phones when we are seeing the film.
See you!
Yours,Tom
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答案

我是一名英语专业的应届毕业生,我觉得你的文章写得还可以,注意一下每句之间的连接词就好.
第一篇
That’s really an unforgettable day in my mind! It seems that 3 hours passed so quickly as we sang and chatted happily on the bus. And the mountain-climbing contest and boat rowing race were so exciting that we were all excited about it!Although one of our groupmates Sarah was injured in the mountain-climbing contest,she still went on climbing.I really admired her! Finally our group got a second prize,we were all on top of the world.During the picnic we ate sandwiches which were made and brought by Helen. What's more when we were walking around the lake I took many photos of the swans in the lake.Having enjoyed ourselves we left there with a beautiful memory at 5:30.