请各位英语高手帮忙检查一下这篇英语文章的语法等有木有错误.

题目

请各位英语高手帮忙检查一下这篇英语文章的语法等有木有错误.
Mrs xu:
I am very careless.So my English is not very good..I am fear of English.When I was a junior high school student,you became my English teacher.Your English is very good.You are my hero.You are kind to us.when i am not pass then exam,you criticizes me with a smile.so I am importance of English.
Although I will become a senior two year later and you will have to retire,but I will not forget your smiling face.You is my English teacher.Forever.
Finally,happy birthday to you!
With best wishes

答案

内容写得不错哦~有些细节方面的时态和用法替你改过了.文章如下
Mrs xu:
I am very careless,so my English is not very good..I am fear of English.When I was a junior high school student,you became my English teacher.Your English is very good.You are my hero.You are kind to us.when i didn't pass the exam,you criticized me with a smile,so I began to focus the importance of English.
Although I will become a senior (student) two years later and you will have to retire,I will not forget your smiling face.You are my English teacher.Forever.
Finally,happy birthday to you!
With best wishes
yours sincerely
XXX
尽量保持了原句的风格和意思哦.
有些地方在将来的使用中希望以后可以注意,
1.“so”这个单词翻译为“所以”的时候,一般不写在句子开端,
2.”Although...,..."这个句式表示“虽然...,但是...”不过在英文的使用中,although是不可以和but放在一起用的,你可以两种方式任选其一,
3.with best wishes,这里我没有给你改,但是个人建议两种方案"With my best wishes" 或者"Best wishes"
4.要有落款 yours sincerely,的下方写上名字