请帮忙修改一下英语作文

题目

请帮忙修改一下英语作文
The vacation is coming.Most of us students are traveling around,however,I am just staying at home and enjoying my holiday.
Firstly,I am planning to spend much time in studying.After finishing homework,I decide to do some extra learning,such as reading literature works,listening to English videos,writing articles and so on.
Secondly,I am going to help my parents with housework.I have been thinking about sharing household duties but it’s impossible during the school term.
Thirdly,I am taking exercises every day because it’s important for us to keep fit.Although I might be tired,I can relax myself and have fun.
To sum up,I am making the best use of the holiday in order to enrich my life.A terrific vacation,isn’t it?
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主要内容是 my vacation plan 之类的
我想把我写的这个句式更丰富一些,字数删减一些
本人初二学生

答案

初二的学生能写出这样的作文已经很了不起了.字数没有必要删减了.我提几点建议吧.
is coming=is around the corner
are traveling around 虽然可以表示将要做什么.不过我们一般用be going to 句型.可以说：are planning to travel outside or are going to travel around.
每一段开头都用be going to 有些单调.
可以这样写：
First of all,I give my sduty top priority.(把学习放在第一位）……
Besize,I think it is also quite valuable to spend my holiday time on some housework.……
Finally,I am going to spare some time to do physical exercise,which can help build my body and I can also find a lot of fun in the process.