看一下这个,哪里有错的都指出来,水平很低的啊!

题目

看一下这个,哪里有错的都指出来,水平很低的啊!
I like travel.Because it can make me happy and I can learn many things from
every places in theworld.I went travel with my mum when I was six.From then on,
I will go to a place that I haven’t been on each summer holiday.So I had been to
many places in the world.Like America,Thailand,Malaysia,Singapore…That’s the
overseas.In China,I had been to Guilin,Beijing,Hong Kong,Macao,Sit sang,
Guizhou… Oh,so many!I give a profundity impression of America and Sit sang.I
went to America with my classmate and teacher for 13 days.But with no parents.
That’s very interesting I think.So I must take care of myself.We had been to
San Francisco,Los Angel,New York and Washington D.C..But L.A.is the most
interesting.Because There is a Disney and Hollywood.And it’s much bigger than
the one in Hong Kong!Also Sit sang make me surprise.That’s the mostbeautiful
place that I had seen.If I have a chance I will show the photo of Sit sang’

答案

I liked travelling because it could make me happy and I could learn lots of things from
many places in the world.I went to travel with my mum when I was six.From then on,
I would go to a place that I haven’t been on each summer holiday.Furthermore,I had been to
many places in the world like America,Thailand,Malaysia,and so on.In China,I had been to Beijing,Hong Kong,Sit sang,ect.Oh,so many!I gave a profundity impression of America and Sit sang.I went to America with my class for 13 days.That was very interesting I thought.We had been to San Francisco,Los Angel,New York and Washington D.C..I thought L.A.was the most
interesting place because there has Disney and Hollywood and it’s much bigger than
the one in Hong Kong!Also,Sit sang made me surprise:it was the most beautiful place that I had seen.If I had a chance,I would show the photos of Sit sang to you!
I enjoyed travelling.That’s why the title of this article is “Travel in my life”!
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