求SAT作文评分和修改!is there always another point of view

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求SAT作文评分和修改!is there always another point of view
A coin has two sides.A “however” does exist all the time.Everything has its benefits and its drawbacks.Some times we are more likely to be impressed by the negative influence,such as frustration,and neglect the positive facet.The “however” reminds me of a great man in the field of science,Alfred Bernhard Nobel.
Nobel held 355 different patents,dynamite is the most famous.And the birth of dynamite cost Nobel a lot.Before 1867,people used nitroglycerin which has a poor stability as explosive.It caused many deaths of workers every year.In order to protect people’s safety,Noble tried his best to make some improvement on the basis of nitroglycerin.Then,he buried himself into experiments day and night.
Out of everybody’s expectation,the path to success is extremely rugged.The experiments are out-and-out nightmares.Once his lab was blew up,not only he himself was injured,but many of his assistants died,including his dear brother.Hi

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有点小拼写语法错误,楼主看看事态就可以了,譬如 NUMBER of deaths caused by low-security (换volatile) EXPLOSIVES would HAVE KEPT increasing.其他的就不一一列举了,如果楼主有时间,可以适当换一些SAT词进去,考官...