请英语达人来点评一下这篇作文,这是一篇高中生作文,要纠正一下语法或拼写错误,并写出需要改进的地方

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请英语达人来点评一下这篇作文,这是一篇高中生作文,要纠正一下语法或拼写错误,并写出需要改进的地方
Dear Sir and Madam :
My name is Li Hua,I am a student of your school summer camp ,My aim to write this letter is that I want to make an appointment with the learning center .The reason are as follow .
First ,As a Chinese ,We have the different cooking style ,It appears to the Chinese ,We should
eat hot food and soup .but in England .I only eat bread .because the food is so cold Second I hope you can give me an accurate account of How to use the library computer .There is a confusing for me.
The Monday afternoon and Friday is suitable for me to meet you for another ,if you are OK,
Please call me :****.
Looking forward to your reply!
Yours
Li Hua

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Dear Sir and Madam :I am Li Hua ,also a student of your school camp .Writting this letter is because i want to make an appointment with the learning center.Here are my reasons .Firstly ,as a chinese ,...