雅思大作文求批改

题目

雅思大作文求批改
Some people say university students should pay for their tuition fees.Some other say the government should pay for the tuition fees.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In present-day society ,it is generally recognized that university education a significant role in our modern life.But at the same time,controversy has arisen about whether the student or the government is responsible for the payment of the tuition fees.
It is obvious that there are various of reasons that the students should pay for the fees by themselves.In the first place,the students are the direct and final beneficiaries of university education.Specifically,the ultimate objective of university education is to serve the students.In the second place,the government has already shoulder the basic education payment.For instance,students pay little when they are in primary and secondary schools.at that time,the majority expenditure of education are paid by the government .lastly,the government n

答案

6.5吧
还是蛮多wrong words和语法上的问题的
good luck