请问这句话有语法问题吗?

题目

请问这句话有语法问题吗?
The main purpose of the painter can be interpreted in terms of a problem in the present education of our children.
还是应该这样：
The main purpose of the painter can be interpreted in terms of education Problems of our children at present.
我想表达的意思是：这幅画作者的目的是想说明当前孩子的教育问题.

答案

首先觉得这种翻法挺做作的, 是规定的格式么?
其次 建议改进为
.in terms of current educational issues on our children.