请英语好一点的帮我看看,有没有句型或单词错误.有请复制原句再改正.

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请英语好一点的帮我看看,有没有句型或单词错误.有请复制原句再改正.
Intro Dear my college teacher glad to see you ,I was Xue ,I am honored to be admitted to Lu Xun Academy of Fine Arts ,Dalian campus and participate in the exam.I am 20 years old.I was an out- of Northeast girl ,my hometown is a small historic city of Tieling ,the famous comedy actor Zhao Benshan is my hometown ,the city's environment is very good ,people are very friendly ,and there are many famous snack I love my hometown .I love painting,I really like the design,so the only sign design profession ,my parents are very supportive of me,when I remember elementary school ,secretly hiding in the room every day,face painting,now in retrospect,I could Fine admitted because their favorite college,God is still very care of me.My spare time enjoys reading and watching movies ,I think it allows me to learn a lot of extra-curricular knowledge ,and I especially like American movies and TV series,such as the current hit " The Vampire Diaries " and " bankruptcy Sisters," which can improve my English listening and pronunciation.In sports ,I like to swim as well as cycling,I believe that these two movements are very environmentally friendly and energy efficient ,but now I still fat ,I hope my strengthening exercises in the coming days ,slowly closing down and lean get healthy ,this is one of my recent goal .This is me.Thank you,teacher .

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Dear my college teachersBonjour!I’m Xue.I was thrilled at the moment I heard I am admitted to the Lu Xun Academy of Fine Arts,Dalian campus.(如果你还没被录取就说I am honored to participate in the exa...