请帮我看一下这篇参赛作文有没有什么语法错误或者是什么毛病,

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请帮我看一下这篇参赛作文有没有什么语法错误或者是什么毛病,
这篇是我打算用来参加奥林匹克英语作文比赛的作文,我是初一的学生.
My home town
Zhanjiang is my hometown,it is very beautiful place.The sky is blue,the clouds are white,the water is clear.
In the spring,the weather is warm andcomfortable,we can fly kites on the prairie.we also can have the picnic .Ithink it's happy!
In the summer,the weather is hot.we canswim in swim pool and eat thewatermelon.the watermelons are sweet and healthy.
In autumn,the weather is cool andcomfortable,the fish swimming in the stream.Autumn rain a lot,but very small.we can fly a kite,you can also see the farmers harvest scene.
If winter comes,the weather gets cold,butnever snow.We can barbecue at home.The food is really good!
This is my hometown,It’s a lovely hometown.I love my hometown.

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My home town
Zhanjiang is my hometown, it is a very beautiful place. The sky is blue, the clouds are white, and the water is clear.
In the spring, the weather is warm and comfortable, we can fly kites on the prairie.we can also have the picnic .I think it's happy!
In the summer, the weather is hot. we can swim in swimming pool and eat the watermelons.The watermelons are sweet and healthy.
In the autumn, the weather is cool and comfortable, the fishes swim in the stream. There are a lot of rain in the autumn, but very small.we can fly a kite, You can also see farmers harvest in the field If winter comes, the weather gets cold, but never snows. We can barbecue at home. The food is really delicious!
This is my hometown, It’s a lovely hometown.I love my hometown.
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