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【雅思大作文】求批改,求帮忙改改语法啥的,马上要考试了.
社会（平均寿命）
Topic:Survey shows that in many countries across the people are living longer but increased life expectancy has many implications for the aging individuals and for society as a whole.what are the possible effect of longer living for individuals and society?
The past few decades have witnessed a dramatic increase in human lifespan,which can be directly attributed to medical advances,increasing levels of education and economic prosperity.In this essay,I intend to explore some possible effects of rising average lifespan .
Fist of all,it is an undeniable fact that longer life is in the best interest of individuals.Regardless of some psychological or economic problems,which occasionally seen among old people who stay alone without children or lack of essential source of incomes ,most of us have benefited greatly from this trend.Specifically,to the old people themselves,they have more time to pursuit their ideals,as well as accompany thei

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The past few decades, we have witnessed a dramatic increase in human lifespan,which can be directly attributed to medical advances,improving of education and economic prosperity.In this essay,I intend...