高一英语文章修改

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高一英语文章修改
If I were a Martian, I would take people from Earth to Mars for a visit. I would show them the mountains, the desert, the forest, the beautiful lakes and the fresh air. I would make them realize the importance of protecting the environment.
If I were a Martain,I would help people to develop their technology. I would teach them how to make the most of the limited resources they have to live better lives. I would help them to produce new spacecraft in order to explore the universe with us too.
If I were a Martain,I would help people to live long lives. I would try my best to make them friendly with each other to reduce wars so that there would be fewer people die. I would take people to my planet with my friends to help people survive the tragedy in 2012.
Anyhow, I would make friends with earthman and turn the Earth and the Mars more active if I were a Martain.
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高一就写得那么不错,真的很了不起.以下是我的几点建议,可能会让你的文章更加出彩.If I were a Martian,I would take people from Earth to Mars for a visit.I would show them the blue mountains,the golden deser...