谁能帮我修改一下这篇作文呢?有很多语法错的,谢!

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谁能帮我修改一下这篇作文呢?有很多语法错的,谢!
My Date
Today is Friday,July25,2008,is the day I wait for long time,and today is my third day to come here.Where my aunt s in..Because my mother think that I am too shy to get on well with other people.So she wants me to come to her sister’s company to have a try how to get on well with the people.At first,I was not agree to here,because I think I am too young and It’s not neccesary for me to know too much about the way to get on well with everyone.But through our talk between my mother and me,finally,I decided to carry on coming here.The reason is I don’t like to review the things that I learnt on senior one and I need to open my mind to talk with other people.The important reason I think of is this time my mark is very bad in our class,so I have no any reasons to refuse my mother’s demand.So I have kept on working for three day.And today is the third day.
I remember on the first day,my mother took me to my antie’s company and my antie took me to the third floor.When we came into the office,everyone was hard working and kept quite.So I walked quitely,too.We went near by a lady,”This is sster A.”My aunt said,.”Hello,sister A.”Then we went by next one.”This is brother B””Hello.”I said with a smile. The junior here for a few time who was graduated from …I forgot it. Then my aunt asked the junior to take care of me and went away. The junior is clear, he understood the reason my aunt asked him to take care of me is we all a student new here. And he is keen to taught me how to used photoshop,how to draw a picture about the building.On the first day,I only drew two pictures.On the way back home ,I told my mother that I don’t want to stay at the company tomorrow.Because I felt I have nothing to learn.The things I learnt is useless for me.I thought my mother will agree to me like used to be.But the words she said surprised me,”Noway!”Suddenly I felt my heart dropped into to the deep sea and my body has strong wind and heavy rain.”Why?!”I spoke loudly because I couldn’t control my self.”

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My Date
It is Friday,July 25,2008.Today is the day that I have been waiting for long time,and it is the third day that i came here,where my aunt is.Because my mother thinks that I am too shy to get on well with other people,so she wants me to come to her sister’s company to take a try and see how I can get along with people.At first,I did not agree to come here,because I thought I am too young and it's not neccesary for me to know too much about the way to get on well with everyone.But after had a talk with my mother,finally,I decided to carry on coming here.The reason is I don’t like to review the things that I learnt on senior one and I need to open my mind and talk with other people.The most important reason I concerned is this time my mark was very bad in my class,so I had no reason to refuse my mother’s demand.Thus sI have kept on working for three days.And today is the third day.
I remember on the first day,my mother took me to my antie’s company and my antie took me to the third floor.When we came into the office,everyone was working hard and kept quiet.So I walked quietly too.We went close to a lady,”This is sister A.”My aunt said,.”Hello,sister A.”Then we went to next one.”This is brother B””Hello.”I said with a smile.The junior here for a few time who graduated from …I forgot it.Then my aunt asked the junior to take care of me,then she went away.The junior clearly understood that the reason my aunt asked him to look after me is we both are students new to here.And he is keen to teach me how to used photoshop and how to draw a picture about the building.On the first day,I only drew two pictures.On my way home ,I told my mother that I didn't want to stay at the company tomorrow,because I felt there was nothing to learn.The things I had learnt is useless to me.I thought my mother would agree with me as she used to be.But the words she said surprised me,”No way!”Suddenly I felt my heart fell into to the deep sea and my body had strong wind and heavy rain.”Why?!”I cried loudly because I couldn’t control myself.”
There must be some mistake i did not find out.Also i am not sure i did it correctly.Good Luck :-)