鉴定下Good afternoon!Thank you all for your support and help during the time.and Ms yang yunzhi a

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鉴定下Good afternoon!Thank you all for your support and help during the time.and Ms yang yunzhi a
Dear All,
Also,yang yun zhi will be in charge of daily operation during my absence.If you have any request ,pls send e-mail or contact us directly,thanks.
yang yun zhi Mobile:[phone]
Tel:[phone]-8072
E-mail:"羊运芝"
Sorry to cause you all inconvenience
MOATECH Wuwen
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Dear All,
Also, yang yun zhi (建议用She,以免啰嗦）will be in charge of daily operation during my absence.If you have any request （建议改成question), pls send e-mail （必须加不定冠词en,整句也可以说pls e-mail ,e-mail 直接做动词,更显简洁）or contact us directly, thanks.

yang yun zhi （要写成所有格形式） Mobile: [phone]
Tel: [phone]-8072
E-mail: "羊运芝"

Sorry to cause you all inconvenience !（建议改成：sorry for bringing you any inconvenience,客套话,未必就是发生了的事实,原句Sorry to听起来好像是为尚未发生的的事情致歉）
MOATECH Wuwen
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