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帮忙改改托福作文~~~~谢谢啦!
谢谢啦~~~~真心请你们帮我改改作文··7月份要考试了,作文还没什么头绪.呜呜···我全部的分就这点了,不好意思哇!
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor!
Obviously, in most case the intelligent friends we have could be the good teachers of us in many ways. They can influence us greatly and enhance the ability of us. However it is not completely true to say that it is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor.
First of all, the intelligent friends have many good characteristics and they can perfect us. But not all intelligent people are good friends. As normal individuals, some of them more or less have some bad habits. To us, we always tend to unconsciously or subconsciously copy something from our friends.
Moreover, the intelligent friends’ are equipped with more experience than us. We can learn many valuable lessons from their experience. He or she could offer the wise advice when we are in face of difficult choices. Just like when we come to an unknown city for the first time, we need a tour guide. But in some centers, we are also limited by their experience. If we never make decides by ourselves, we could hardly be a mature man.
Intelligent people are sophisticated in the life, A deficiency of intelligent people as friends is the fact that many intelligent people are lack of common senses of humor, They pursue their benefits through manipulating the legal loophole., and sap the nation’s virtue by speculation and the desire for sudden , unearned wealth . Sometime they are just too clever to be wise and it could throw them into trouble and give a way to success. In a word, it is rather superficial to simply say that making friends with intelligent people is better!

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obviously ,in most cases intelligent friends we have could be the good teachers of us in many aspects.They can influence us greatly and enhance ability of us ,However,it is not completely ture to say that it is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor .
First of all,the intelligent friends has many characters ,which can perfect us .We can learn lots of valuable lessons from their experience .He or she could offer wise advice when we are in face of diffilcult decisions.Just like when we come to an unknown city for the first time,we need a tour guide.But in some centers(cant catch what u r trying to say),we r also limited by their experience,if we never make decisions by ourselves.we could hardly be a mature person.
The intelligent is sophisicated in life.A deficiency of interlligent people as friends is the fact that many of them r lack of common sense of humor.they persue their benefits through manipulating the legal loophole ,and sap the nation's virtue by speculation and the desire for sudden,unearned wealth.sometime they r just too clever to be wise and it could throw them into trouble and give a way to success .In a word,it is rather superficial to simply say that making friends with intelligent people is better.
你好,写的文章不错,没有大的问题.有个别的地方修改了一下,加油啦.