能给我的托福作文评下分吗,大后天就要考了,

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能给我的托福作文评下分吗,大后天就要考了,
是否同意people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries
The statement claims that people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.I concede that in some aspects,this claim has several considerable merits,yet it ignores certain compelling points that actually,human knowledge advancing has more to do with their wide insight,and traveling to foreign countries can play a more pivotal role for people to learn more about life,which provides the necessary impetus for their seeking of personal fulfillment.
One point that can aptly illustrate this is that people traveling to other countries provide outlets for communications between them who differ in tradition,morality,ideology.People in the world are more closely integrated into a whole society,they share their viewpoints,interests,experiences and so forth.In the past decade,we have seen rapid expansion of internatio

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