帮我看看我的英语作文,有什么地方需要改的,

题目

帮我看看我的英语作文,有什么地方需要改的,
in daily life,we always talked about "opportunity".opportunity is not like air which always around us.on the other hand,they don't come often.so,if you are a lucky man wo get such a good opportunity,you should grasp it without hesitate.
as we all know,only opportunity cannot help us fulfill ourambitions.there are other important factors we should own,like positive attitude,hard work,good preparations etc.otherwise,opportuniyt may slip through one's just like water.
maybe,opportunity are not abundant in our life,but everyone is equal for them.we can not acquire them only when we are prepared.just as a proverb says:opportunities are only for prepared minds.

答案

which is always around us
who gets such a good
maybe opportunity is not abundant