找错误,或许是语法,或许是顺序等.

题目

找错误,或许是语法,或许是顺序等.
There are many people off the financial confusion or lack of money for the knowledge of inductive insufficient,always try to learn more knowledge,to take what degree or what certificate and so on,this is another form of the error,the author in his free of narration in easily broken this "wealth shang veil".
Because of using experiences as the evidence,the author broke many wrong ideas about personal,along with "rich dad and poor dad in the global best-selling book,many readers of weak heart when facing money can be destroyed in the global formation in recent years people the biggest shock,financial management concept of kiyosaki" rich dad "series of products in the world has already become the fervour of power.
The world is full of talented poor.In many cases,they are poor or financial difficulties,or only earn less than they could have earned income,not because of their known things but because they unknown things.They only focus on improving and perfecting cooked hamburgers skills,but do not pay attention to improve sales and send hamburger skills.Maybe McDonald's best hamburgers can do,but they can make the average hamburger premise,do the best sales and send work.
We see so many yearn for promotion and raise the employee,then promotion and salary can meet them to realize their dreams wish?General won't.If the enterprise can't satisfy the jin

答案

always try to learn more knowledge 这里前面是逗号,连接了两个谓语动词,而又没有连词或者从句.前面加个.They 后面的and so on 打上句号,把this大写.the author前加个and 吧.语法小错误太多了只有意思,应该是网上翻...