谁帮我看一下我写的英语小作文,

题目

谁帮我看一下我写的英语小作文,
Do you have your own birthday party I did.When I am 10 years old,I was very happy I had finished the birthday party.
At the party,I invited many friends.First of all,we ate a lot of delicious food.Then we went for a walk.We also watched a number of DVDs.Finally,they sang a birthday song and send a gift to me.
In one word,I had a good time.At the same time I would like to thank my mother.It’s because she has done a lot for me.Mum,thank you.

答案

Do(Have) you have(had) your own birthday party I did(have).When I am(was) 10 years old,I was very happy thatI had a birthday party.
I invited many friends to my party.We ate a lot of delicious food and then we went for a walk.We also watched a lot of DVDs.Finally,my friends sang a birthday song to me and gave me their gifts.
In one word,I had a good time.At the same time I would like to thank my mother because she has done a lot for me.Mom,thank you.
改了一下,没有做大改动,不过你连妈妈都拼错了.